1. Frederick M. Jones is an American inventor, he held more than 60 patents
in a variety of fields. COMMA SPLICE
=> Frederick M. Jones is an American inventor. He held more than 60 patents
in a variety of fields.
=> Frederick M. Jones is an American inventor who held more than 60 patents
in a variety of fields.
2. Although refrigeration was his specialty. FRAGMENT
=> He held more than 60 patents in a variety of fields although refrigeration
was his specialty.
3. In 1935, he invented the first automatic refrigeration system for long-haul
trucks. COMPLETE SENTENCE
4. Later, he adapted the system to a variety of other carriers. COMPLETE
SENTENCE
5. Including ships and railway cars. FRAGMENT
=> Later, he adapted the system to a variety of other carriers, Including
ships and railway cars
6. His invention eliminated the problem of food shortage it changed Americas
eating habits. RUN-ON
=> His invention eliminated the problem of food shortage. It changed Americas
eating habits.
=> His invention eliminated the problem of food shortage, and it changed
Americas eating habits.
=> His invention eliminated the problem of food shortage; indeed, it changed
Americas eating habits.
7. In addition, Jones developed an air-conditioning unit for military field
hospitals, a portable X-ray machine, and a refrigerator for military field kitchens
in World War I, after the war, he worked as a garage mechanic and developed
a self-starting gasoline motor. COMMA SPLICE
=> In addition, Jones developed an air-conditioning unit for military field
hospitals, a portable X-ray machine, and a refrigerator for military field kitchens
in World War I. After the war, he worked as a garage mechanic and developed
a self-starting gasoline motor
8. In the late 1920s, Jones designed a series of devices for the movie industry,
he adapted silent movie projectors to accommodate talking films and developed
the box-office equipment. COMMA SPLICE
=> In the late 1920s, Jones designed a series of devices for the movie industry.
He adapted silent movie projectors to accommodate talking films and developed
the box-office equipment.
9. That delivers tickets and automatically returns change. FRAGMENT
=> He adapted silent movie projectors to accommodate talking films and developed
the box-office equipment that delivers tickets and automatically returns change.
10. Whether we realize it or not, we owe a lot of our modern conveniences to
inventor Frederick M. Jones. COMPLETE SENTENCE
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