Review GS Chapter 13 and Conditionals and Hypotheticals PRACTICE and Resources.
1. Compose 10 sentences about one topic. Enumerate them. They do not need to comprise a paragraph. Use real and unreal conditionals: past, present and future. Use If, unless, as though, as if, otherwise, whenever, wish, hope, will, can, may, should, must, would, could, might (affirmative or negative).
2.
Examine the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your
sentences in the Web Vocabulary
Profiler at the Compleat Tutor.
(Remove the sentence numbers.) Include at least 5% words from the Academic Word
List (AWL), which are shown in yellow.
Type a suitable title in the Subject Line of your message; capitalize the
content words (N, V, Adj, Adv).
3. Underline the verb phrases. In parentheses after each sentence, indicate if the sentence is timeless present real, possible present real, future real, past real, present unreal, future unreal, past unreal, or a mixture – indicate each part.
11/29/2014
1-If I'm available on[2] the 3rd week of November, I will schedule a huge birthday party for my sister.
2-Whenever[3] the weather is too cold and windy outside, I will set up the party indoor[4].
3-If my friends and family decide to come from France, I am probably the one to see them off at the airport.
4-Due to the big number of guests coming from La[5], I might rent the main studio in town if the price is not too high.
5-As long as I am not short of cash, I will make the party enjoyable and exciting.
6- I would spend thousands of dollars for the party if I won the Mega Million.
7-And if I were the president of Mission College, I would give a day off to all ESL students to come to my sister's party.
8-If all of the guests could spend the whole night at the party, I could book the famous orchestra from the San Jose Convention Center to play.
9-If I hadn't[6] too much homework to do, I might stay overnight to drink alcohol and enjoy[7] with my sister, family and friends.[8]
10-I don't know why people love so much[9] to make[10] a birthday party as though[11] it might cost them a lot of time and money.[12]
This submission includes 10 sentences about one topic, and they are enumerated. The verb phrases are not underlined as directed. Not all of the 10 sentences use conditional grammar.
You apparently failed to examine the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler because you did not enter any results below your sentences. You wrote sentences with real conditionals in the present and future but not in the past time frame. You wrote sentences with present unreal conditionals but none with past unreal conditionals. Use the comments in the footnotes and the correction symbols to revise and edit the grammatical, sentential, and mechanical errors.
11/29/2014
If children are under two years old, them[13] should not watch TV or computers at all.
If children devote to[14] watch TV and sit in front of computers all the day, excessive media use must[15] affect [16]vision.
If children select educational programs such as culture, geography or history to watch[17] television and computers[18] [19]will expanded[20] children's access to knowledge.[21] [22]
Unless[23] children otherwise[24] finished[25], [26]children could[27] watch TV and relax.
If I were a child, I would hope to so many time[28] play computer game[29][30].
If I hadn't spent a long time watch[31] TV when I was young, my vision would not have blurred.
Whenever children watch TV, they should be from it[32] at least 10-12 feet away[33].
Children give their whole attention to watch TV as if them[34] didn't know the thing[35] at all.
I wish there would be[36] a kind of television which doesn't[37] hurt children's eyes in future.
If children watch 2-3 hours of educational programs, I believe television and computers will have a positive effect on children.[38]
Words in text: 171
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This submission includes 10 sentences about one topic, but they are not enumerated. The verb phrases are underlined. You examined the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler, and you listed the results below your sentences.
The first two sentences use present/future real conditional, but they contradict all of your other sentences, so it is unclear whether you understand the meaning of the sentences overall.
They is the subject pronoun; them is the object pronoun. This is so basic that it is surprising to see this error in an advanced grammar class. You used some of the words in the list in #1. Unless and otherwise are not used correctly; besides, they cannot be used in the same clause. Unless my children finish their homework, I do not allow them to watch TV. My children must finish their homework first; otherwise, I do not allow them to watch TV. Review verbs with wish: I wish there wereÉ None of the sentences is error-free. Use the comments in the footnotes and the correction symbols to revise and edit the grammatical, sentential, and mechanical errors.
11/28/2014
All of my family have[40] a party dinner on the Thank-giving[41] Day.[42]
We will attend at[43] a[44] my niece's house because she has a new-born baby.[45]
If it is not things[46] change, we will start at 7:30p.m. on Friday.
My oldest sister will cook lobsters with noodles dish. [47]
My younger sister may make seafood-soup dish.[48]
My youngest sister will make tuna-salad dish.[49]
Otherwise, my daughter could cook pork-rib grill that is her favorite dish.
Whenever we get to party, we often cook a lot of dishes and always there are redundant foods. In the Vietnamese Culture there is the sentence :"Your eyes larger than your stomach".
We won't finish our conversations untill midnight.[50] I can not imagine that everyone could feel highly enthusiastic to talk.[51]
After that, we have plan for Christmas party.[52] I wish we can have good time together.
The key word, Thanksgiving, is misspelled in the title and in sentences. This submission includes 10 sentences about one topic, but they are not enumerated. Most of the 10 sentences fail to use conditional grammar. You failed to underline the verb phrases as directed. You even copied the poor sentence structure from Student 4's submission! You failed to examine the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler; you did not enter any results below your sentences despite the fact that I have request that you do so every time you've submitted your writing. This submission fails to use the core grammar structures. Since you have ignored every correction and comment I have made on your writing this entire semester, I will not try to correct any more of your sentences.
11/27/2014
My family has a wonderful plan on the Thank-giving[54] Day.[55]
We will go [56] the[57] cruise to
Mexico on that day.[58]
If it is not things change[59],
we will start at 5:00AM on Friday.
We may drive to there to save money .[60]
We wonÕt cancel our cruise, even if it is rain on Friday.
Whenever we get to Long Beach, we will check in to the cruise and be ready to go to the broad.
I can not imagine that how[61] is the interior of the broad[62] look[63] and how is[64] their activities.[65] I wish[66] they are[67] all great.
We must pack clothes and everything what[68] we need enough for four days.[69]
When the broad[70] arrive, we will go to Los Angeles to eat a special lobster[71] at the Chinese famous[72] restaurant where[73] is located near to[74] Phuoc Loc Tho[75] supermarket.[76] It tastes very good.[77] I wonÕt forgot[78] to buy the[79] fresh fruit.[80]
After that, if we have time, we would like to visit the[81] Hollywood[82] where we can easy[83] to see the famous people .
I wish[84] we can have [85]good time together.
The key word, Thanksgiving, is misspelled in the title and in sentences. This submission includes 10 sentences about one topic, but they are not enumerated. Most of the 10 sentences fail to use conditional grammar. You failed to examine the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler; you did not include any results below your sentences, as directed. You failed to underline the verb phrases as directed. You used wish incorrectly; you should have used hope. Review the lessons as stated in the first line of the directions. There are over 30 errors in this submission. None of your sentences is error-free.
11/30/2014
We love the beach.
If my kids are off from school, we definitely trying[86] going[87] to the beach.
Whenever the weather was nice on the weekend over the summer, my husband rode his motorcycle to the beach with friends and colleagues.
Unless[88] it will rain[89], he apparently[90] wonÕt go.
When we enjoy going to the beach, we were relaxing[91] by the visible[92] view.
If you like the sound from the waves, you should spend more time on the beach.
When the sky was clear on the beach, we was[93] able to see very far.
If we had stayed at the beach, we could have seen the scenario from the sunset[94].
Otherwise it is getting to[95] late for the minors[96] if we would stayed[97] for the sunset.
As if[98] the sun is ongoing[99] down,[100] it looks like a sphere.
We wonÕt cancel the beach day,[101] even if itÕs raining on the weekend[102].
if my kids are off from school we definitely trying going to the beach
whenever the weather was nice on the weekend over the summer myhusband rode his motorcycle to the beach with friends andcolleagues
unless it will rain he apparently won go
when we enjoy going to the beach we were relaxing by the visibleview
if you like the sound from the waves you should spend more time onthe beach
when the sky was clear on the beach we was able to see very far
if we had stayed at the beach we could have seen the scenario fromthe sunset
otherwise it is getting to late for the minors if we would stayed for thesunset
as if the sun is ongoing down it looks like a sphere
we won cancel the beach day even if it raining on the weekend
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This submission includes 10 sentences about one topic, but they are not enumerated. The verb phrases are underlined. You examined the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler, and you listed the results below your sentences. You used all some of the words in the list in #1. Unless and as if are used incorrectly. You wrote sentences with real conditionals in the past, present and future. You wrote sentences with unreal conditionals in the past but not in the present or future. Two sentences are error-free. While some errors are merely mechanical, others have problems with verb tenses, verb forms, and meaning.
Use the comments in the footnotes and the correction symbols to revise and edit the grammatical, sentential, and mechanical errors.
11/30/2014
1. If
I had not administrated[104]
my daughterÕs time of[105]
watching the[106] TV, she might
have been in the front of the TV for five hours yesterday. (Past unreal)
2. Unless
my daughter commits the daily time limit of watching the TV[107],
I wonÕt turn on the TV. (Possible present real)
3. Whenever
my daughter is watching [108]educational
program, she learns about acknowledge[109]
and culture and travels the globe from[110] the entertainer. (Timeless present real)
4. I
wish my daughter would follow the policy that I make[111]
to watch the[112] TV. (Futureunreal)
5. If
Lucia didnÕt watch[113]
the[114]
TV for two hours this afternoon, she should[115]
have finished her homework before the[116]
bed time. (Mixed time)
6. I
hope he[117] stops
eating the[118]
junk food while watching the[119]
TV; otherwise, he will be overweight and get a high risk of diabetes[120].
(Future real)
7. If
he[121]
didnÕt view the[122]
variable[123]
violence[124]
acts too[125]
much[126]
on the[127]
TV, he[128]
did not show[129] the aggressive
behavior. (Past real[130])
8. She
likes the PBS channel so much as if[131]
nothing could be worthy than[132]
the TV in the world[133] during
watching the TV[134]. (Present
unreal)
9. Whenever
children spend too much time in the front of the TV, they wonÕt[135]
get the[136] enough
physical exercise they need[137]
and their vision could decline. (Futurereal[138])
10. Study
indicates[139],[140]
if children watch too much the[141]
TV, their creations[142] and social
abilities could be weakened since they are passive to get[143]
the information. (Possible present real)
K1=81% k2=4% AWL=5% Off-List=10%
This submission includes 10 sentences about one topic, they are enumerated, and the verb phrases are underlined. You examined the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler, and you listed the results below your sentences. There is an attempt to write real and unreal conditional sentences in the past, present, and future. Some are successfully; some are not. Review Chapter 13 Conditionals. There is an excessive use of the. You had better review Chapter 6 Nouns and Chapter 7 Articles and Other Determiners. Over 40 errors are marked. No sentence is error-free.
11/30/2014
1/ If we have adaptive immunity, our bodies are familiar with
the germs around us, and we can fight them off. (present real)
2/ When I am [144]worried
about my final exam so much[145],
the stress gives me a headache, and I couldnÕt[146]
sleep sufficiently for days.(timeless past[147]
real)
3/ If she had the chicken pox, she wonÕt get it again.
(mixed time)
4/ Unless you are shot a flu vaccine[148],
probably you get[149]
sick.(possible present real)
5/ If I am travelling[150]
to Africa[151]
now, I will probably get Ebola.(future
real)
6/ If I did exercise much[152],
I wouldnÕt be overweight.(future[153]
unreal)
7/ My daughter looks as if she gets sick[154]
after she contacted to[155]
a friend who was sick.(real present)
8/ My father has a[156]
lung cancer. He wishes he hadnÕt smoked.(past
unreal)
9/ Whenever we have a good mode[157]
like eating healthy food and drinking clean water, we can exclude[158]
some disease[159].
(real present)
10/ He gets many kinds of vaccines to built[160] [161]immune system. He hopes they are able to restrict the germs and bacteria that could harm him.(possible present)
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This submission includes 10 sentences about one academic topic, they are enumerated, and the verb phrases are underlined. You examined the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler, and you listed the results below your sentences. The sentences types are varied and well-structured in most cases. You used many of the words listed in #1. As if was not used correctly; see p 250. The woman was screaming as if she had contracted ebola. (She had NOT contracted ebola, but she was perhaps so afraid of it that she threw herself into a panic.) You made sentences with real and unreal conditionals in different time frames, including mixed time.
12/1/2014
1. When we surf the Internet, we can acquire much information about whatÕs going on in the world.
2. If the Internet had not been invented, we wouldnÕt have built up our online social network.
3. If the Internet disconnected[162], we couldnÕt enjoy online shopping and e-commerce.
4. If the[163] minors are addicted to the online game or chatting, their lives might be destroyed.
5. If I spend too much time on[164] using [165]computer, I will take a short break and[166] relieve my eyestrain.
6. Unless we are able to gain access to the Internet, we wonÕt take online classes.
7. If I had grammar questions, I posted them on online Discussion Forum or asked my instructor by email.
8. I believe I will not get lost in a new place as long as I use mobile navigation.
9. If I were you, I might wait until the new generation of smart phone[167] released[168].
10. I wish we would expand our knowledge and broaden our mind to a greater extent with the help of technology.
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This submission includes 10 sentences about one topic, they are enumerated, but the verb phrases are not underlined. You examined the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler, and you listed the results below your sentences. The sentences types are varied and very well-structured. You used some of the words listed in #1. You made sentences with real and unreal conditionals in different time frames.
12/1/2014
If we don't protect the environment, resources will slowly drying[169] up.
If you don't protect the environment, the survival of our land will be gone.
If we don't protect the environment, natural disasters occurred[170] frequently.
If the polar ice caps[171] melt, the economy developed and[172] [173]densely populated coastal areas will be swallowed by the sea.
If we start to use clean energy, global warming speed[174] will slow down.
If all countries communicate with[175] environmental protection, our earth will become beautiful.
Unless we stop the destruction of the ozone layer, our environment will continue to deteriorate.
We began[176] the environment protection 100 years ago, our earth would be more wonderful.
Our country will cause[177] economic problems if the earth's environment continues to be destroyed.
If we don't protect the environment, we will lose our home.
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This submission includes 10 sentences about one academic topic, but they are not enumerated. The verb phrases are underlined. You examined the vocabulary in your writing by copying and pasting your sentences in the Web Vocabulary Profiler, and you listed the results below your sentences; they show a high percentage of AWL vocabulary. You used the same basic sentence pattern for all 10 sentences instead of varying the sentence types. Eight sentences use future real conditionals, 1 uses past unreal, and 1 uses (timeless) present real. They are correct, but you didn't accept the challenge of using many of the advanced grammar patterns. You did not attempt any sentences with present unreal, past real, or present real conditionals. You used very few of the words in the list in #1.
[1] Wf: ger
[2] ww
[3] ww
[4] wf
[5] Los Angeles (L.A.)
[6] wf: didn't have
[7] VT: enjoy the party
[8] This should be a future REAL conditional, not a present UNREAL conditional. If I don't haveÉ I will stayÉ
[9] wo: Éparty so much
[10] ww: have
[11] ww: even though
[12] Not conditional
[13] wf: S
[14] ww
[15] ww: will
[16] det. See Ch 7.
[17] prep: on
[18] punc
[19] S
[20] wf
[21] Don't you think parents should select what children watch? Do children have the maturity, knowledge or experience to select such programs?
[22] This sentence contradicts the previous two sentences.
[23] Ww: If
[24] del
[25] tns: pres perf
[26] det
[27] tns
[28] del
[29] pl
[30] You can add an adverbial phrase here.
[31] Wf: ger
[32] del
[33] prep phr: from the television set
[34] wf
[35] ?? unclear
[36] wf
[37] wf
[38] If you believe this, why did you write sentences 1 and 2?
[39] sp
[40] tns: pres cont or fut
[41] sp
[42] This is not conditional.
[43] del
[44] del
[45] This is not conditional.
[46] This clause does not make sense; fix it.
[47] This is not conditional.
[48] This is not conditional.
[49] This is not conditional.
[50] This is not conditional.
[51] This is not conditional.
[52] This is not conditional.
[53] sp
[54] sp
[55] This is not conditional.
[56] prep
[57] ww
[58] This is not conditional.
[59] This clause does not make sense; revise it.
[60] This is not conditional.
[61] Don't use two subordinators
[62] ww: ??
[63] Don't use is and look in the same clasue
[64] sva, wo
[65] This is not conditional.
[66] ww
[67] tns
[68] ww
[69] This is not conditional.
[70] ??
[71] dish/dinner/meal
[72] wo
[73] ww
[74] del
[75] What's the purpose of mentioning this store?
[76] This is not conditional.
[77] This is not conditional.
[78] wf
[79] ww
[80] This is not conditional.
[81] del
[82] punc
[83] ww
[84] ww
[85] det
[86] tns: fut
[87] wf: inf
[88] ww. See p 243
[89] tns: pres. See p 241
[90] why this word?
[91] Tns: see 1st cl
[92] ?? a view cannot be invisible!
[93] sva
[94] we could have watched the sun set/the sun setting/the sun going down
[95] ww
[96] youngsters/young children
[97] wf. See p 249.
[98] ww. See p 250.
[99] ??
[100] While the sun is going down/ is setting, (?) What, doesn't the sun look like a sphere anyway?
[101] Punc. See p 240.
[102] wo – doesn't this prep phr belong to the 1st clause?
[103] del
[104] ww: controlled/restricted/limited
[105] del
[106] del
[107] Meaning? Agrees to limit her TV watching to NN hours?
[108] det
[109] wf: acknowledge=v. knowledge=n. She gains knowledge/she expands her knowledge
[110] fww: through
[111] tns: pres perf (You don't make the policy every day.)
[112] del
[113] tns: past perf (past unreal cond). In fact, she watched TV for two hours, so she didn't finish her HW.
[114] del
[115] ww: would
[116] del
[117] Lucia = she?
[118] del
[119] del
[120] increase her (?) risk of getting diabetes
[121] Lucia = she?
[122] Ww: so many
[123] ??
[124] wf:adj
[125] del
[126] del
[127] del
[128] ww
[129] wf: would
[130] past unreal
[131]
ww: so much that + result.
See p. 229 as if
[132] wf: comparative adj?
[133] ?? What is the TV in the world??
[134] during + n/n phr
[135] tns: general truth simple present
[136] del
[137] sticky. enough physical exercise OR the physical exercise (that) they need
[138] Whenever designates a habitual action, so it is used for general truth present.
[139] sva
[140] punc
[141] del
[142] wf: adj
[143] too + adj + inf
[144] very
[145] del so much – there's no result clause
[146] tns: can't matches present in the 1st cl.
[147] If this situation is no longer true, the 1st clause must be revised to use past tense.
[148] Ww: get a flu shot/ get vaccinated with a flu shot/ receive a flu vaccine
[149] wo, missing word. You will probably get
[150] tns: pres
[151] not the whole continent – do not overgeneralize. West Africa
[152] ww, wo. Did more exercise
[153] pres unreal
[154] ww. This is a past situation. Did she get sick or not? Fact: She got sick afterÉ. Past possibility: My daughter could/might have gotten sick if she had had contact withÉ
[155] had contact (n) with
[156] del
[157] have good conditions
[158] ww: avoid
[159] pl
[160] wf
[161] det
[162] If the Internet became disconnected / If we became disconnected from the Internet
[163] del
[164] del
[165] det
[166] inf of purpose: to relieve
[167] pl
[168] passive
[169] wf
[170] tns: fut/modal (fut possible cond)
[171] sg S+V
[172] del (or revise – but I don't know how to advise you)
[173] det
[174] the N1 of N2 (esp for inanimate nouns): the speed of global warming
[175] ? do you mean communicate about? Or do you need a different verb to fit your meaning?
[176] Cond: If we had begun
[177] ww: suffer from?