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15 capitalization errors.
1 Calculus was first proposed in the seventeenth \Century > century\
by the \english > English\ philosopher and mathematician \sir
isaac newton > Sir Isaac Newton\ while he was an undergraduate
student at \cambridge university> Cambridge University\. 2 History
books say that the thought of gravitational attraction came to Newton one
\sunday > Sunday\ afternoon in the fall of the year while he was
sitting underneath an apple tree. 3 After an \Apple > apple\ fell
from the tree and hit his head, \newton > Newton\ questioned why
apples always fall down rather than up. 4 He spent the next 18 months of
his life developing the mathematical principles that explain the gravitational
attraction of objects for each other. 5 As a consequence of developing his
theories of gravitational attraction, Newton was also able to explain how
the planets in our \Solar > solar\ system move in relation to
the \Sun > sun\. 6 He explained his theories of gravity and motion
using his newly invented \Mathematical > mathematical\ principles,
which are known today as \Calculus > calculus\. 7 \twentieth >
Twentieth\-century space flight has been developed from the fundamental
principles first proposed by Newton over 300 years ago.
20 capitalization errors.
1 Thanksgiving has been a national holiday in the United States since \october > October\ 3, 1863. 2 0n that date, President Abraham Lincoln proclaimed the fourth thursday > Thursday\ in \november > November\ as a national day of giving thanks. 3 However, the practice of proclaiming a day for thanks did not originate in the \united states > United States\. 4 The ancient \hebrews > Hebrews\, the \greeks > Greeks\, and the \romans > Romans\ celebrated harvest festivals; the \english > English\ also celebrated a harvest festival. 5 Nevertheless, because of its special history, \thanksgiving > Thanksgiving\ is probably the most \american > American\of the national holidays in the United States. 6 The settlers who are now called Pilgrims had left \england > England\ in the seventeenth century because they had not been allowed to worship in their own way. 7 They first fled to \holland > Holland\ and in 1620 sailed to North America on the \mayflower > Mayflower\, seeking a place to worship as they pleased. 8 Their original destination was Jamestown, Virginia, but storms blew them northward, and they landed at what is now Plymouth, Massachusetts, in icy \november > November\. 9 During their first winter, over half of the settlers died of starvation or illness. 10 The next year, friendly \indians > Indians\ taught them how to plant corn and how to hunt animals. 11 After their good harvest the next fall, Governor William Bradford proclaimed a day of special thanks. 12 In 1789, \president george washington > President George Washington\ proclaimed the first national celebration to celebrate the adoption of the \constitution > Constitution\.
From Improving the Grammar of Written English: The Editing Process, Beverly Benson and Patricia Byrd
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Marsha Chan
English as a Second Language Department
Mission College
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Santa Clara, CA 95054-1897
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