Skim writing assignments submitted by the selected students in ESL 970G.
Pass or No pass? Your valuable opinion, please!
Ch 3 Paragraph in the Past Time Frame, 150-175 words using different verb tenses in the past and present time frames. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
2/20/14
ÒDonÕt
talk with your mouth full.Ó Perhaps, we have heard the same or similar orders.
In essence, good manners can help people feel less uncomfortable in our social
life.
I still remember clearly the
incident which happened five years ago when I was in
my native country---Chain. It was a hot summer day, and
I was working at my brotherÕs tea house as a new manager.
Suddenly, three tall young Tibetan men entered our store,
instead of asking me for a cup of tea, they went straightly to
the corner where the only table was isolated from others. For some
reason, we have prejudice about Tibetan, for they wear special costume with
sharp knives underneath, not clearly. Everyone in this house had
noticed the four men, but no one looked at them;
somehow, I persuaded myself to serve them. I hadnÕt
been hesitating for a long time; then Iapproached their
table to ask them whether they needed something to drink. When
I came closer, I couldnÕt believe what I saw because they were
squatting and lying on the sofa with their dirty
shoes. In addition, they didnÕt order anything, nor replied my
question. My brother motioned me to leave. I knew something
bad could happen, so I asked him let me handle this, one more
chance. Then I brought four glass of water to the table, while I was
putting the glass, one of them gave me his cell
phone. After the conversation on the phone, I understood why
because these people only speak dialect.
After this incident, I truly believe that good manners can prevent many unexpected incidents and help our life run smoothly.
276 words. AWL 1.78% incident incident incidents isolated similar
Compose an academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in any time frame. Use adverb clauses and adverb phrases to show time, to give reasons, to show concession or contrast, to show place, and to show purpose. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL)
5/1/2014
I used to think that people who have nice appearance tend to
have more opportunities: in dating, employment, and so forth. Having
heard someone being fired of being too attractive, I realize that
beauty can be disadvantage. Similarly, people are frequently being judged of
their appearance, such as too short, fat and ugly. Even though we
dislike being judged by lookists, we usually attempt to predict othersÕ out looking
and behaviors. For example, we might have stereotypes about someone who has
dirty clothes or ugly face. Of course everyone has different degree of
discrimination. It is fine to keep this opinion to ourselves, but when this
prejudice became judgement, it is not fine. Although oneÕs
appearance should not be judged, to wear appropriate clothing is
important. I think that we should not judge people before we
really know her or him, and avoiding being lookism is necessary.
147 words. 2.72% AWL appropriate discrimination predict similarly
Chapter 13 Conditionals: Compose 10 sentences about one topic. Use real and unreal conditionals: past, present and future. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
5/8/2014
1Have you ever wish that you could have access to affordable or free healthcare. That was what Obamacare supposed to be.
2. It is necessary to have health insurance if you live in United States because of the expensive medical expenses.
3. I was disappointed when I tried to enroll Obamacare. Only if my husband and I had no income, we couldapply for free health care.
4. If I apply Obamacare now, I will pay the same money as I paid before.
5. My classmate who has low income and a teenager son has free Obamacare. If I were her, I could have free Obamacare too.
6. If my husband and I had had no income, we could have gotten free health care.
7. If I had free health care, I would be happy.
8. If I find a full time job, my employer might pay my health insurance.
9. If you were me, what would you think? Would you look for a full time job, or would you wait until graduate?
10. I wish Obamacare could change litter bit, so that I could not have to look for a full time job.
4.32% AWL: access income income income job job job medical
Ch 6 Nouns and Noun Modifiers & 7 Articles and Other Determiners: Compose an academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in any time frame. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
3/28/2014
When I was twenty seven, I saw a
woman model that was practicing some martial art in a
commercial film on television. I was very impressed and never
saw the martial art which was named ÒKendoÓ before.
This is Japanese fencing. After a week, I signed up for a
Kendo training center and I have been practicing two or three
times a week. I am so happy and have decreased my stress while
I practice it. ItÕs sometimes depressing when I donÕt
achieve my expected level. So I try to reach a realistic
goal which balances through home life, career and hoppy.
I took a Kendo tournament which was
attended by about two hundred competitors last Sunday in San
Jose. Even if I couldnÕt get any metal, I had a feeling of satisfaction.
The result was that I succeeded to go to the individual manÕs
quarterfinal and group manÕs semifinal.
I hope continue to make a Kendo practice forever
if not, I canÕt move my body. I am going to teach Kendo
skills and spirit to others.
177 words. 2.76% AWL: achieve depressing goal individual stress
Ch 12 Adverb Clauses and Adverb Phrases: Compose an academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in any time frame. Use adverb clauses and adverb phrases to show time, to give reasons, to show concession or contrast, to show place, and to show purpose.
5/2/2014
Most of the people use the internet for news, gathering
information,and online shopping. Also, he can debate about serious and light
issues even
though he hasnÕt any knowledge about it and he isnÕt an adult. It is very
important for us to take freely because one may not like to be
controlled by forced power. Moreover, it creates increased numbers of
debaters who donÕt want to open to the public with his information. By
the time he joins a debate, he hopes to discuss about some topic without
pressure and heavy responsibility. But, he gives a lot of good idea and
informations when
want to attend a debate. Because, he dislikes to
respond about his idea online, he thinks that it doesnÕt need to regulate
the internet.
Do you agree that the regulation has a negative effect
to debate online while itÕs controlled by the government? Yes,
I agree that. It must be minimized government interference but it need to moral
guidelines online. He who is a troublemaker generates so many rumors and insult
to others when
he debates or discussions without the guidelines. In
addition, some of them attacks someone who isnÕt guilty and they go to jail due
to the fact that he lie . So we try to keep good moral when
use of the internet.
219 words. 7.56% AWL: adult creates debate debate debate debate debates generates guidelines guidelines issues minimized negative regulate regulation respond topic
Ch 3 Paragraph in the Past Time Frame, 150-175 words using different verb tenses in the past and present time frames. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
Last monday round 10: 15pm i had big accident to my job one of my patient felt and she was in a lot pain .
It was very sad for that accident and also it was just 15 minute for me to get off from work but guess i had to stay long because i had to fill all the fall
form and get report done before got off for my chift . After i got all the papers done i realized that my patient was in a lot pain .
so i had to called or X-ray to come do the X-ray good thing the came and X-ray was done in hour after doing that we got the result that she has broken her hip
that was very sag for 89years old to get that kind of accident . we sent her to the hospital . The next day that was last tuesday we called the hospital to find
out how she was doing they talked us that she is going to have surgery .Every one felt bag with that new. That was my bag day at work
189 words. 0.54% AWL: job
Chapter 5 The Passive: Compose an
academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in
any time frame. Use both active and passive voice verbs. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic
Word List (AWL).
3/16/2014
Animated movies have changed
a lot than before. Before the movie was drawn by hands . Today most animated
film are not drawn by hand. The animation is done by computer software. Also
special effects for movies , such as star wars , are done by computer
animation. To create the illusion of movement , an image is put on the computer
and then quickly replaced by a similar
image with a small change. While this technique is similar to hand drawn
animation the work can be done much faster by computer.
92 words. 11.36% AWL: computer computer computer computer create image image similar similar technique
Ch 12 Adverb Clauses and Adverb Phrases: Compose an academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in any time frame. Use adverb clauses and adverb phrases to show time, to give reasons, to show concession or contrast, to show place, and to show purpose. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
what do immigrants have to give up ? What do they gain?The United States is unique in that it is a nation of immigrants ,old and new.The US is the country where most immigrants like to live. Many immigrants came to US because of political unrest and economic problem . also many people came besauce of famine , in another side many people came so that they could be reunited with their families who had came before. I think U.S is the country everybody can live her or his dream life. Even though the US economic is down , but people still apply for America visa.
106 words. 6.86% AWL: economic economic immigrants immigrants immigrants immigrants unique
Ch 3 Paragraph in the Past Time Frame, 150-175 words using different verb tenses in the past and present time frames. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
When I was young, I walked to school every day. My school was too far away from my house but it didnÕt mean to me. Some time, I often met my friends when I was going to school. After 2 years, I hadnÕt walked to school anymore, instead I went to school by bicycle. I had been drivingbicycle to school for a long time after that. My friends drove bicycle to school as well. At that time, we were always waiting others and wenttogether, that was the fun time in my life.
92 words. 0.00% AWL: N/A
Chapter 13 Conditionals: Compose 10 sentences about one topic. Use real and unreal conditionals: past, present and future. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
5/9/2014
if it not raining in the morning, he goes to school by bicycle
if he feels strong enough, he can walk to school
if you are finished your homework, you can play computer
if he didnÕt spend a lot of time playing game, he can get a good grade on that test
even if he feels better or not, he will take a final test tomorrow
if he went to bed late, he felt tire when he wake up
if he had a lot of money, he could travel to the Moon in Summer
if he had spent his time to study, he could have passed the test
if he could speak English fluently, he doesnÕt need to study ESL classes
he doesnÕt like some people act as if they know about everything
2.21 AWL: computer final grade
Ch 6 Nouns and Noun Modifiers & 7 Articles and Other Determiners: Compose an academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in any time frame. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
5/1/2014
When I was young, I have loved soccer. I often played it with my friends at school where I had many memories. The reason I like to play soccerbecause it helps my health and keep in touch with my friends. Since 2009, I left Vietnam in order to move to America, I have still been playing this sporteven though my life is busy. I often play it at the park every Saturday. Actually, if I have time, I will play much more so that I can get a better health. One of interesting events is we have BBQ at the park after playing soccer game.
So now IÕm happy with my life in the US.
115 words. 0.00% AWL: N/A
Ch 6 Nouns and Noun Modifiers & 7 Articles and Other Determiners: Compose an academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in any time frame. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
3/27/2014
Everybody has different
hobbies that they like to do for fun or just to relax. There are many kind of
activities like football, basketball, swimming, or baseball. It all depends on
each personality. For me, volleyball is my favorite hobby because it's part of
my life and I can not live without it.
Since I was a little girl I played volleyball in
the school team and also with my friends in the neighborhood. My mother told me
that I liked kicking the ball around and had so much fun with it when I was
only about two years old. Since then, playing volleyball is my favorite's sport
and it is my hobby whenever I have free time.
118 words. 1.68% AWL: relax team
Ch 12 Adverb Clauses and Adverb Phrases: Compose an academically
written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in any time
frame. Use adverb clauses and adverb phrases to show time, to give reasons, to
show concession or contrast, to show place, and to show purpose.
5/4/2014
When i was 19 years olds, my family moved to the United States. I was a hard time for me because i need to improve new life in here. For learing new language, i had to try in many way to improve it and also, i had lots of failure. It couldn't make me give up anythings. About finding jobs, I went anywhere where they are hiring and did many fail interview. I knew the life in USA is not easy that's why i need to try as best as i can. So, i have good life like now.
99 words
Chapter 13 Conditionals: Compose 10 sentences about one topic. Use real and unreal conditionals: past, present and future. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
5/8/2014
All of you knew that send so many hours watching TV and sitting in front of computers are not only good for health but also not good for social experiences.
Now, children sent most of their time for electronic like doing their homework, watching video, listen music or learning something. But, they donÕt know that it is dangerous for them. If they sit in front of TV or computer so long, their eyes will be vicinity and their brain will work less. The important thing is they canÕt learn any new things from social, so if they graduate, it is hard for them to get good jobs. Let them play outside equal let them make my friends. It will help them a lot now and in the future. Also, their healthy will be fallen because they do not exercise. In my opinion, donÕt let your children spend so many time on that. We must organize their time and encourage them to play outside as much as they can. It helps them to control their body and reduce sick.
178 words. 0.99% AWL: jobs
Chapter 2 Future: Compose a short
essay of 150-175 words using different verb tenses in the future time frames.
Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic Word List (AWL).
2/27/2014
When I was a kid, I listened a lot of stories about the moon ( They aren't true stories) I dreamed about the moon. Some day people will fly over to the moon.They will have gotten a lot of gold. They will have gotten a lot of money . People will have the happy life in the moon. People will have a lot of free land to build the nice houses. We won't have to go to work By the time the dream comes true, I will have finished my life.
91 words. 0.00% AWL
Chapter 5 The Passive: Compose an
academically written paragraph of 150-175 words using different action verbs in
any time frame. Use both active and passive voice verbs. Strive to include at least 5% words from the Academic
Word List (AWL).
3/13/2014
Chickens were killed in many ways. In my country, most people went to the free market and bought the
alive ,fat chicken . Chicken got cut their throat by the cheff cook when they were still alive. Some chicken could run
around the kitchen after their throat got cut . Their blood spread all over the kitchen . Look really scarry ! .
Lucky, we don't see how the chicken got killed before came to the super markets here but they got cut in
difference ways also. How poor the chicken !
91 words. 0.00% AWL